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mysterious poem from some 15 years ago--"Original Sin" - bluedreamer - 08-09-2009
walking back and walking forth they roam the earth
displaced from the ancient the god in our image
birthed you from its head
no choice
the worm cast out walks behind the god
the one who walks in the sun
Walking back and walking forth
they roam the earth;
displaced from the ancient
the god in our image
birthed you from its head--
no choice.
The worm cast out
walks behind the god
the one who walks
in the sun.
--I wanted to change it a bit and added the title up there
mysterious poem from some 15 years ago--"Original Sin" - docta lee - 08-10-2009
Hey bluedreamer
That poem is weird but i like it.
mysterious poem from some 15 years ago--"Original Sin" - bluedreamer - 08-11-2009
Thanks docta Lee, it's one of my better ones, one of the kinds that that which the fiction I identify(ed) as I didn't write, especially back then as I
was 90% **** back then, lol, now it might be around 80%!
1% carries a lot of value though, i look back and I can tell.
I've been thinking about the poem in terms of don juan's syntax.
It occured to me that maybe the ones who walk follow each other in turn, now who is the worm?
I think I'm going up there to change the way it's lined out , i think it would work better.
see ya
mysterious poem from some 15 years ago--"Original Sin" - Guest - 08-21-2019