mysterious poem from some 15 years ago--"Original Sin"

[bluedreamer]

walking back and walking forth they roam the earth


displaced from the ancient the god in our image


birthed you from its head


no choice


the worm cast out walks behind the god


the one who walks in the sun











Walking back and walking forth


they roam the earth;


displaced from the ancient


the god in our image


birthed you from its head--


no choice.




The worm cast out


walks behind the god


the one who walks


in the sun.










--I wanted to change it a bit and added the title up there

[docta lee]

Hey bluedreamer




That poem is weird but i like it.

[bluedreamer]

Thanks docta Lee, it's one of my better ones, one of the kinds that that which the fiction I identify(ed) as I didn't write, especially back then as I
was 90% **** back then, lol, now it might be around 80%!




1% carries a lot of value though, i look back and I can tell.




I've been thinking about the poem in terms of don juan's syntax.




It occured to me that maybe the ones who walk follow each other in turn, now who is the worm?




I think I'm going up there to change the way it's lined out , i think it would work better.




see ya

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